Critique

My best author: Wonderful Travel.

        This story tell me a guy in U.S. and he travelled to many different countries, almost all over the world. I think it is meaningful to people. Travelling should be encaraged. At the last paragraph of his story, "Overall, travel all the world can exercise himself and travelling can also broaden our eyesight. " I think it is a good conclusion. All of the items we need write in our stories are appear naturly in his story. Some of them are souvenir, some of them the author create them to real people and farm.


My weakest author:  Unforgettable visit .

        First of all, the format of his story is really wrong. He used different size of the words and different kinds of words. In his story, there is just one paragraph. I think readers will not be interested in this kind of story. At the same time, he just put the 13 items in his story bluntly. I can not find any meaningful and useful points in his story. And the last weak thing he did in his story is there is too much talk in his story. It`s not easy for readers to understand.